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TAS: Azula's Redeption ch8 by *flamehead23a:iconflamehead23a:





The Avatar Saga—Azula’s redemption
Chapter 8: Of Enemies and Enigmas.
By Flamehead23a

Disclaimer: I don’t own avatar, nor any character affiliated with the show, I do own The White Phoenix, however. Please don’t use this story as your own, nor post it other places without my approval. Reviews welcome, critiques scrutinized, and flames absorbed and redirected with twice the power. Please, Enjoy!

“With the other gods I lived on Olympus, and the times were good. Eventually our adherents faded, and with them our influence on the world. I was one of the fortunate—faith in me continued under the children of Romulus. There I was called Phoebus, and my power endured.”
“This is a history lesson for the insane, isn’t it?”
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The town of Yi Jing—outer Fire Nation, 105 ASC. (After Sozin’s Comet) –Year of the Ox

“I have heard enough.” The speaker wasn’t loud, but he might as well have shouted. When Storyteller worked, any interruption was like chewing a grain of sand in a mouthful of rice. From door of the tavern, two men in black armor came toward the bar, one tall and heavily bearded, one short with blood red Yu Yan war paint around his eyes and face. As they walked, Kuzane saw the feared insignia emblazoned over their hearts. Rough Rhinos.

Worse—behind them walked another man, taller than anyone Kuzane had ever seen. He moved without a sound, save for the dull thumping of his Iron leg and the metallic squeaking from his prosthetic arm. A strange tattoo adorned his forehead, in the likeness of a third eye.

Kuzane wasn’t the only one who saw the men. Children were trickling out the door. The older ones tried to appear casual, but the youngest broke into a run before they got outside. Against common sense, two boys stayed—Kuzane and his terrified school friend.

“I believe we have all heard enough,” the taller of the two Rhinos said with a quiet severity. He was barrel-chested, with small hazel eyes that stared out from deep sunken sockets. A long spear was strapped to his back, adding to his already fearsome profile. Quietly, Kuzane’s friend slipped out. “You seem to know valuable information, old man. You’ll be coming with us. Won’t he, Vachir?”

“Yes, Kahchi, I believe he will,” the other Rhino spoke. He had a Yu Yan helmet, and his quiver bristled with black-fletched arrows. He signaled to the metal-limbed mute. “Bind him.”

The silent man did so with rough efficiency. Storyteller endured the whole thing amiably, without saying a word. The two watched their associate tie Storyteller’s wrists, then turned away, as if dismissing the man from their minds. They took a long look around the room, their inspection finally ending with the bald, aproned man behind the bar.

“F-Fire’s heat warm you!” the owner of Dockside tavern stammered, his voice much too loud in the quiet of the room.

“It does,” Kahchi said simply. He took another long look around the room. Finally he turned his head to the archer who stood back from the bar. “Vachir, would a fine place such as this be hiding useful informants from our organization?”

“Anything is possible, Kahchi.”

“Ahh,” the spearman said softly and looked slowly around the room, once again ending with an inspection of the man behind the bar.

“C-Can I offer your honors a drink? If it be pleasing?” the owner offered quickly.

There was only silence.

“I mean… a drink for you and your soldiers. A fine barrel of rice wine? Sure I had no idea he had such tales to tell. If I knew it was of interest, I’d have come straight to your honors…” his voice broke, leaving the room suddenly quiet. He swallowed, the dry click of his throat reaching all the way to Kuzane by the door.

“A generous offer,” Kahchi said finally.

“Very generous,” echoed Vachir.

“However, strong drink sometimes tempts men to wicked actions.”

“Wicked,” Vachir whispered.

“And as a captain, I can’t knowingly give my men that opportunity. I must refuse.” Kahchi’s voice dripped sublime regret.

“You would think,” Storyteller’s voice rolled out like buzzard-wasp honey, “deserters like you would be more concerned with the Fire Lord finding them than with detaining the elderly and terrifying honest men.”

Turning, the Rhino Captain snatched a clay cup off the bar and dashed it against Storyteller’s head, shattering it. “Do not speak in my presence!” he said. “You know nothing!”

Storyteller shook his head a little to clear it. A trickle of blood worked its way down his driftwood face, seeping into his white beard. He seemed to address the air in front of him. “You should run, Kuzane. I have friends who can help me, but there’s nothing you can do here. Go.”

Since he wasn’t looking at the boy when he spoke, there was a moment of confusion. Kahchi gestured and the silent man struck Storyteller a blow to the back of the head. His eyes rolled back, and his head lolled forward. Kuzane slipped out the door, onto the street.

He took Storyteller’s advice, and was in an alleyway before they had even left the bar.
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“Hah Ha! Hot damn I love a good fight!” Azula and Mat stood amid a field littered with groaning bodies. Those conscious were softly voicing their pain, the best off trying to crawl away. Matthias turned to Azula, the high of battle dulling his senses and his power almost completely tapped. “So, Princess, was it good for yo—”

Azula’s open palm made contact with his cheek before he had completely turned to face her. He saw stars, while she stood there quietly seething.

“Oooww… so I guess you remember now, huh?” Mat beat a hasty retreat back across the stream, Azula throwing punches and kicks with ferocity.

“You conceited, puerile, arrogant…peasant! You’re the boy from the drill! The Avatar’s friend. You… you kissed me! Right in the middle of our fight you had the gall to kiss the Crown Princess of the Fire Nation! How dare you even show your face to me after all that you’ve done?”

“Oh, so you remember more than the drill, huh? All those other times too?”

Azula paused. Her memory was suddenly jogged—images previously blocked came flooding forth. With a primal growl, Azula advanced again, her voice dangerously low. “Oh, now I remember. You were there in the catacombs, when Zuko and I defeated the Avatar. Our vacation at Ember Island, you were there too. And you were at my brother’s escape of the Boiling Rock!”

“Don’t forget the invasion of your palace, Princess—I fought with all those elite troops you had stationed there.” Mat quipped, immediately regretting it as several lightning blows sent him stumbling into the stream.

“And every time we fought, you’d end it the same way! You’d…you’d…”

“Merely my—oof. My way of showing appreciation for dueling such a skilled combatant.” Mat was cut off when Azula’s leg sweep sent him crashing into the frigid water.

He crab-walked, stumbling over both the slippery ground and his rushed apology.

“Alright, hey, I’m sorry, okay? I was young and stupid and drunk with power and you were pretty and I—”

Mat flinched as Azula lashed out once more. He opened his eyes to see her foot between his legs, inches away from a very sensitive spot. He looked at her unreadable face, then quailed as she brought the foot up and in-between his pants. Hard. He gave a sound, halfway between a whimper and a whine, and lay there in the stream for several minutes. Eventually he regained some semblance of composure, and slowly picked himself up off the ground, wincing.

“What can we do to them?” Azula had turned back to the defeated Rhinos, suddenly finding herself with a store of pent up aggression, and desperately wanting to vent.

“Ahhh, let’s just leave ‘em.” Mat dried his clothes with a flash of heat, still cautious but fairly confident the danger had passed. “When we get back to the palace, I’ll tell your brother where we found them, and he’ll send some troops to root them out.”

Azula took a moment, channeling her anger out in deep breaths. With deliberate restraint, she spoke. “And what makes you think I’m going back to the palace?”

Mat cocked his head. “You heard Sog. Somehow, they know my fight with Zuko was a ruse. They were prepared for us, anticipated our breakout. We’ve got to go back and re-group, hope Sokka comes up with a better plan. Besides, I don’t want both your brother’s forces and whoever these people are out hunting us.”

“What do you mean, ‘Whoever these people’? We know who they are—Fire Nation Military deserters.”

“I’ve got a feeling they’re just the tip of the iceberg.” Mat drew Sog’s sword from the firebird’s ashes. He hefted the weapon before throwing it to Azula. “Look at this sword, tell me what you think about it.”

Azula caught the blade by its hilt, knowing volumes just by its weight. “This is an Earth Kingdom sword. It’s relatively clean, only just starting to rust… Sog got it after the war, he couldn’t keep a sword like this in good shape for any length of time.” She turned the sword over, inspecting the seal at the base of the blade. “It’s a master’s sword, uniquely made.”

Matt nodded. “Which means he must have got it from someone high within the Earth Kingdom military, because merchants sure as shit don’t sell weapons like these.” Mat watched as Azula roughly pulled the scabbard from Sog’s unconscious form. She stifled the bandit’s protest with another kick before sheathing the sword and then shouldering it. “I think we’ve got enemies on all fronts, and worse, I think they’re all working together. That’s why we’re heading back, Princess. To come up with a new plan of attack.”

Azula crossed her arms under her breasts, fixing Matthias with her hardest stare. “Obviously Zuzu’s peace isn’t as whole as he and the Avatar think it is. Now what happens if I say I’m not going with you?”

“Then I’ll respect your wishes, let you go, and probably get myself killed trying to stop every possible person who would do you harm before they find you.” Mat looked up from the bird’s ashes, returning Azula’s hard eyes. His light humor was gone; there was steel in his voice, as unyielding as her new weapon. Azula knew her fate was sealed, and hated it. Still, she knew Mat would do just as she promised, and despite how angry she was, she didn’t want her fresh start marred by sending a man to his death. She found some small comfort, however, in sensing remorse behind Mat’s gruff tone.

“We have to cut this problem off soon, or else it will just escalate and innocents will get hurt.”

“What do I care if some villagers get their houses raided?”

“Well, you’re still the princess. Doesn’t part of your vaunted mandate of heaven come from your protection of the people?”

“Mandate of heaven was thrown out the minute I landed in Boiling Rock, Mat. Besides, I’ve never cared for the peasantry—I don’t need the approval of the unwashed masses to rule.”

Mat sighed, tired of her confrontational attitude. “Listen—The Rough Rhinos used to be just five guys. Now they’re a sizable and organized criminal organization, and I’ve got no doubt that their leader is one of the guys working to plunge this world back into chaos. We’ve got to stop them, and according to my dreams, both you and your mother factor into this whole conflict.”

“You mean your dreams, which may or may not be true? Or even your own?”

Mat’s jaw tightened, and he spoke through the growing doubt in his voice. “Those dreams were real. The things I saw…I felt…they have to be real.”

Azula turned away, refusing to argue. After a while, she helped Mat gather the scattered remains of their food and supplies. Eventually, the two came together around the ashes of Azula’s phoenix.

“…It died saving me…”

“Oh, it didn’t die. But I was impressed it swooped down for you like that. The most I can ever get outta these birds is help delivering a message.”

“If it’s not dead, then how—”

“Princess, simple constructs are one thing, but when I make phoenixes, I make them to last.” Matthias removed errant sticks and pebbles from the pile of ashes, tossing them aside and squatting on the ground. “Listen close. Any time this guy goes all burn and smolder on you, just remove any foreign objects from his remains, then give him a little spark of heat and…”

Mat snapped his hand, and placed the flame sitting over his thumb into the ashes. The pile of soot began to glow a dull orange, then red, then finally a pure white. The ashes burnt away completely, leaving behind the small form of the phoenix, back to its newborn state. It looked up at Azula and peeped happily, waddling over to her bare feet. She bent and scooped the firebird into her arms, smiling as it voiced its pleasure at being held. Mat shook his head with a rueful smile.

“Simply amazing. It’s a good thing for Sog he attacked you when he did. If he had waited till nightfall that bird would have been triple the size. They grow fast. You gonna name it?”

“…Fenghuang.”

Mat nodded in approval. “Virtue, duty, grace, faith, and mercy. Something to aspire to, I suppose.” He ignored Azula’s sour glare. “I’m pretty sure it’s a girl, too. Or at least, as much of a girl that a metacreated plasma-bird can be.”

The firebird swiveled its head to its creator, clacking its beak together sharply as if to admonish him. Then giving one last chirp to Azula, it took off into the air, rising on the afternoon’s thermals and soaring out of sight.

“Well, we’d better get moving. That village I got food from isn’t much farther away by foot; we can reach it and get a balloon to the capital.”

Azula nodded, and the Phoenix and the Princess walked together, traveling to the first of many places, on the first of many days.

                                            Here ends episode 3
                  Ανδ Σο τἑ αδυεντυρε βεγινς...τἑ φιρστ μυσε φινδς ιτ'ς Φοενιξ...

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©2009 *flamehead23a
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Author's Comments

okay, Chapter 8! It's a short one, I know. But the next few are longer, I promise.

1: Of Schoolboys and Sunflowers [link]
2: Of Alcoves and Appearances [link]
3: Of Daring’s and Darkness [link]
4: Of Breakdowns and Breakouts [link]
5: Of Powers and Partings [link]
6: Of Rhinos and Remembrances [link]
7: Of Drills and Duels [link]
8: Of Enemies and Enigmas (blech so short)
9: Of Baths and Beginnings [link]

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:iconweirdlet:
And here we see just the barest shape of the dangers to come... I like this. After the war, of course there's going to be both overt and covert hostilities, for decades to come. Azula feels like Azula- she may have missed out on five years of humanity, but by gum, she *will* not tolerate indignities (at least if they're offered as flirtations instead of honest aggression).

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:iconflamehead23a:
whew, the urge to reply to every one of your comments is nigh overwhelming, but I think I'll save that till a time when I can do it adequately, and instead just reply here for now.

glad you're enjoying it so far--these chapters you've read so far, along with 9, could be considered a bit removed from the rest of the story. In the sense that they were written almost all at once, in one big chunk when I first sat down to start writing this. the end result is, in my opinion, my poorest writing coupled with too much focus on the OC coupled with too many adventure story cliches.

So I guess what I'm saying is that after this week's chapter, you should notice a subtle, but important shift in the story.

now as for Mat... I know you've got nothing but my over-the-internet word to go on here, but he's not an insert. I almost wish I had the lack of ethics to say that I was a girl, and therefore there's no way he could be an insert, but that'd be lying. What I will say is that, honestly, these are the only things we have in common:

He has bright red hair, where I have blond hair with a slight ginger tint,
and his names starts with an M, as does mine. (that ended up being unavoidable actually, since his name in ancient greek means "gift from god" and I had already planned on using that in his backstory.

which brings me the main reason he shouldn't be considered an insert-- Mat's got a backstory a mile long-- something that actually bit me pretty hard in the ass when I started writing this. See, I've been developing Mat as a "Doctor Who" for fiction for several years now, coming up with backstory, then backstory on that backstory, then reasons why that backstory happened... it eventually turned into a mythos. And when I started this, my first real foray into creative writing of any sort, all that story wanted to come out at once.

the result is what you got in those first few chapters. It wasn't until I got a good, gonna-crush-your-soul-to-make-you-a-better-writer Beta-reader, that I realized just what I was doing. I was writing an OC, Gary stu story with little Avatar sprinkles on top. That was wrong of me-- it was unfair to the fandom, and the absolute most backwards way i could have gone with to get people interested in Mat. So I took it all down, retooled it best I could, and the result is what you see here-- still a little on the OC centric side in the early chapters, but comparatively less so.

where was I? Oh yeah, he's not an insert. he says things I wouldn't say, has gone through things I couldn't imagine going through, and does things I wouldn't dream of. (Tricking Azula into a kiss? what the hell kinda cocky shit does that?) Honestly, my personal opinion is that he's a bit of a dick--less so than when he was younger--but still not the easiest guy to get along with. If you've been reading the story-before-the-story tidbits atop each chapter, you'd know that he came into his job as a Musagetes very young, and the effect it had on his development was profound. I mean, if you were thirteen and suddenly given what is literally powers from a god, without almost any guidance on the ethical qualms of power, how do you think you'd turn out?

But I'm getting off-track again. No, he's not an insert. Yes, he started out as a MAJOR gary stu. Actually, I had written up to this point before I was even told of the term "Mary Sue" and what it implies. Of course, upon learning about it, I made the most epic of facepalms you ever could have seen. Thus began the arduous task of bringing Mat back from the cliff of Sue'dom he so precariously teetered on.

Don't worry, very soon we'll see both the ugly side of his powers, and not far after that we'll see enemies find ways around his powers. and if chapters 7 and 8 are any indication, Mat doesn't do well when things go...shall we said, unplanned.

I'd be happy to talk to you more about him (again--I've got more backstory than I know what to deal with, and it shows terribly.) Via notes if you want-- it could give you some perspective you'd probably enjoy. I just don't want to say too much here, and fill the comments with spoilers. (who am I kidding, no one's gonna read this... ;) )

but I'm glad you think I've kept the cannon characters IC. My view is-- If you're going to use another man's characters, you'd better damn do well by them. the whole reason I'm practicing my writing with a fanfic is so that I can work on developing and expanding characters in plausible ways. Let me know if I ever step outta line-- The last thing I want to do is fuck up one of bryke's creations.

okay, this comment is now entirely too long. I'm going to slink away now. Thanks for reading all this drivel, and I hope you enjoy today's chapter!

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:iconweirdlet:
*nod* By insert, I haven't necessarily meant a self-insert- it's just the contrast of a blatantly modern-earth kind of guy, with advanced knowledge of things that just *aren't* in the Avatar universe- or not as presented- casually striding around correcting things is the big pill to swallow.

I can understand that he's come a long way, and while the concept still carries a knee-jerk revulsion, in practice he's very much fun and interesting. One of the things that helps with it is that while he's got some poplar media knowledge, he's not portrayed as being the wisest or the wittiest because he knows things citizens of the Avatar-universe proper wouldn't. There are a lot of the major traps that he skims, but mostly avoids- it's just that the insertion of him into the canon carries with it Implications, even done skillfully.

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:iconweirdlet:
On having re-read the last bits- sometimes an insert isn't just about being just like you, but being what you'd like to be/doing what you'd like to. Doing so to the point of being a flaw has been done before, but it's something that can work.

Understanding it as an exercise in writing your guy as he might interact with the Avatar-verse does take some of the sting from it. I'm a little torn on whether or not a prologue with a little more explicit explanation of the setup would be helpful- there are many worlds, connected by such-and-blah, and in just this occasion one of those few who can cross the boundaries has made his way....

I would just like to reiterate, before I toddle off to crash, that Kuzane and his adventures totally make my day and this story.

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:iconflamehead23a:
like it said in the little tidbit at the top of chapter 3, Mat was 13 when he got taken from home. His knowledge of anything "our world related" is therefore limited to about a middle schooler, say 7th or 8th grade. (as evidenced in chapter 3, he knew from middle school science what molecules are, and that they expand when they heat up, but not much beyond that.)

And no, he didn't watch Avatar on TV and then pick when and where he jumped in-- it doesn't work like that.

like I said, I'd be happy to discuss his backstory further via a note thread. I'm only hesitant to do it here on account that I want to leave the lazy-bone 11 or so people who read it here in suspense. (you don't comment, you don't get spoilers. so HAH!)

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:iconpicofuego55:
i liked the creativity you put into the re-birthing of the phoenix. i kinda felt like it was harry potters version but with a major twist so that it couldn't remotly be called copywriting...

it's smart... and it's very personalized. something that many writers fail to accomplish.

bravo.
:iconflamehead23a:
thanks. I wanted to try something unique with the rebirth, and tied together several phoenix myths, some Psionic DnD stuff, and my own imagination to come up with this.

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